Outside Reading, Week 7, Post B

Wow. Well, that was surprising. You spend the entire book building up to this point, the moment where our two plot lines intersect and Blair finally meets Ludmila, and then you throw something like Blair and all of Ludmila's family dying on us like that? What is it with writers and twisted endings. They always fail miserably and leave the reader disappointed and frustrated with the writer and characters and talk about your deus ex machina! Where did this Gnez soldiers come from? You just felt like throwing them into the equation because you weren't creative enough to think of a rational solution to the conflict, huh? Did killing everyone really solve your story line problems? You can't just go around throwing guns into the conflict, hoping that the people who are causing trouble for you get shot, and then leave with the characters who are easy to write for!

Also, while we're on this topic, your epilogue makes no sense at all. Why are Bunny, Ludmila, and Maks living together? Bunny didn't even like Ludmila in the first place, and Maks and Ludmila were estranged last time I checked. Also, why did she name her child Blair? There didn't really seem to be much of a connection between the two of them and they only met for a few hours, if that. Your whole ending is ill conceived and overall, very disappointing. What you should have done is either had a) Blair and Ludmila come in from outside and kill the two Gnez soliders. Then the two families can be friends (maybe move back to England?) or b) Blair and Bunny realize that they only really need each other to be a family and having a pseudo relationship with Ludmila doesn't constitute a family. Hmmm...maybe I should have written this for you.